Fan Fiction

This Song *Oneshot *Completed*

by BoBoLi0us

Chapter 9

Review from Exculpate Delusion

Title: This Song.
Author: BoBoLi0us
Fanfic URL: www.winglin.net/fanfic/BEEZYOO4
Reviewer: JENNiSM_ @ Exculpate Delusion.

- Story Title 7/8
This Song. When I first read the title, I knew this story would be related to music. I like this title, somehow the title just tells me this story would be somewhat romantic.

- Appearance 12/12
The poster is gorgeous. I like how every bit of the poster is black and white, and a little bit of green stands out.

- Forewords 8/10
The forewards were great, clearly telling us how she caught his attention and him unconditionally falling in love with her.

- Plot 15/15
The plot is very interesting, and unique. I haven't read another fanfic that has any familiar plot with yours. And of course, it was touching.

- Flow 6/8
Since it's an one-shot, things would be going faster and straight to the point. I like it. Although, I would like it more if you didn't make this story an one-shot. 'Cause meh want to read more!

- Originality/Creativity 11/12
As I said, your plot is unique.

- Characterization 5.5/7
You described the characters' attitude and a bit of their appearance, I can already slightly picture them in mind. But that's just slightly, it's still not detailed enough.

- Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary 10/13
You didn't have any spelling mistakes. I realised there were some unnecessary full stops, which could be replaced with commas instead. I found a typo again. :D
"Taec shook her head and slipped the phone back into his pocket."

- Writing style 9/10
Your writing style is very interesting, easy to understand and read. You didn't make me all confused when things are going too fast.

- Enjoyment 5/5
I love this fanfic, really enjoyed reading it. I love the ending, although it wasn't what I expected and wanted.
& Wow, I think 92.5 is the highest review score I've ever gave. XD Yeah, I'm tight. :)

Sub total: 88.5/100

Bonus: 4/5

Total: 92.5/105 (88/100)

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First thing, that bit of green is Taec.
Second thing, i realised i STILL forgot to change it back.
Full stops?
I hate real long sentences, so yeah. I mean if i talked like this, and you talk like that, and i just like, put this comma here, and like you put a comma there, and like yeah, like how am i -ive lost my mind-

Dolce Vita.
My cherie amour.
Love you babes.

07.30PM . 211OO9
BOBOISM
Keep Fresh & ballin'
Payce & Love
Out.