| Fan Fiction |
by th1rd3ye
-Details
1. Title: 10/10 Marks
Remarks: Your title is indeed very special. It isn't anything like the others about love and such. Yours is about each individual character and their destiny. I think the title suits the story very well.
2. Forewords: 9/10 Marks
Remarks: You included a prologue and main characters of the story was introduced. However, it would be better if you introduced a little more on the characters. Maybe their personality or which element or powers they represent.
3. Poster/bg: 10/10 Marks
Remarks: Your poster is very nice. It suits the mood of your fanfic perfectly. The characters seem to have expressions like in your fanfic. And also there is a beautiful goddess in the poster. Which constantly reminds me of the mystery of the goddess.
4. Originality & Creativity: 10/10 Marks
Remarks: Normally fanfics like yours writing about the magical wonders focuses on love. However, as I've said earlier, your fanfic doesn't focus mainly on love but also the individual characters and their destiny.
5. Language: 7/10 Marks
Remarks: There are some spelling mistakes and grammatical mistakes. Like you spelled 'Goddess' as 'Goddness'. I've noticed that you like to use the word 'Then' at the start of the sentence. I suggest you should refrain from it a little because it would be rather boring. Also, I've noticed that there are different tenses in one sentence. There are quite a handful of mistakes, not so obvious though.
6. Reader friendly: 8/10 Marks
Remarks: There were quite a few long paragraphs (like in chapter 10). I think you should follow your usual style and space them out a little more. Partly because your font is rather bright because of the black bg, so it's easy to get lost while reading the long paragraphs.
7. Plot: 10/10 Marks
Remarks: I think you carried your plot out well. You didn't only focus on one, but all four of the main characters at the same time. None was neglected. Also, I like the fact that you planned out the different destiny they will have instead of just writing about their love all the time. I like the part where the mystery of the goddess isn't revealed at the very start of the story.
8. Story flow: 10/10 Marks
Remarks: I think that you did well for this criterion. Your story wasn't moving too fast nor too slow. You focused on all the main characters too.
9. Writing Style: 9/10 Marks
Remarks: I have nothing against your writing style. Just occasionally when long paragraphs are involved, it'll be rather hard to differentiate who is the one speaking.
10. Additional Points: 8/10 Marks
Remarks: I think your story is very unique. I really like the fact that you have their destiny planned out instead of just focusing on love all the time. There's mystery and romance in your story, which makes it very alluring.
total score : 91/100