| Fan Fiction |
by th1rd3ye
poster- 8 out of 10
Your poster was very nice and creative but i think the poster maker should have added more brushed but other then those props to the designer!
Forward-7 out of 10
your forward was very interesting and I like how you explain about the black moon history but i think you should of done better and tell us more about it
1 chapter-6 out of 10
chapter 1 was pretty interesting but it could have been better, you describe the history of the goddess but i thought you should of done a little more to catch some excitement into the readers eyes but the rules you put were pretty interesting
grammars- 10 out of 10
your grammars were really good! I didn't catch any mistake
spelling-9 out of 10
Your spelling were good but i did catch some errors
plot-5 out of 5
I love your plot! It was very creative! The elders and the moon were all like stuff they can use in a movie one day
character introduction-3 out of 5
you did introduce your character but you should of gave an explanation about each character and their history
excitement-8 out of 10
it was exciting to read and it makes me wonder what will happen next and will their be a love seen between the characters.
Length-9 out of 10
Your length was perfect but i you should have made it longer
Bonus- 6 out of 10
I like your story out of all and your plot really gave you a lot of points but you could improve it a little and add some more excitement to it.
Comment-
your story was great and i enjoy reading it but their are times when i got bored and would just skim thorough, I’m a reader who gets bored easily and gets distracted easily and it's hard to keep up with a reader like me but i advise you to add more spice to keep readers like me excited
79% = C