| Fan Fiction |
by BlueCan
Story Title 8/8-I like the title it sounds sweet. It actually fits in with the story!
Appearance 10/12- The poster is nice and I understand it's a one-shot but you could have requested for a poster, not to put on the actual fic but separate. The background is plain though.
Forewords 8/10-If I look at the title, it doesn't say it's a one-shot so I was expecting it to be a full story. Plus the only thing that was there is an application form, so that did help.
Plot 15/15- I didn't know about it until I got to the second part, but its nice and I understood some parts of it in the first one.
Flow 8/8- Perfectly paced.
Originality/Creativity 12/12- I find this original and creative. I find this one original because I find some that brings back the person to life. I find this creative because
Characterization 7/7-You used all the characters so it wasn't hard to manage. I'm glad you didn't just throw in Ryuu-chan in the story like that.
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary 10/13- I found some but they are just minor mistakes but they did cost you some points.
Writing style 5/10- I didn't really like the way it's written. It looks like one big paragraph, even though you separated them. You could have separated the dialogues too.
Enjoyment 5/5- I cried when she died!It was cool!!This is actually my first time reading a Japanese fic. especially since its Hey! Say! Jump!
Sub total 88/100
Bonus 5/5
Total: 93/100
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Thanks Exculpate Delusion for reviewing my fic ^^ I'll try my best to improve my writting. Maybe I'll review from you guys again hehe..Thanks to myangelteuk as well!! (you like teukie huh?I like kyuhyun hehe)
.BlueCan.