| Fan Fiction |
by kon_kon
Story Title - 8/8: Your title is very rare, interesting enough to drug me into reading your story. :)
Appearance - 10/12: Awesome poster, not so awesome background.
Forewords - 3/10: You’re forewords doesn’t show anything, except for the small info on the story. Your forewords should express or show a little something about the story. Like wise, your poster was awesome enough to drag in readers, but your forewords made them click the ‘x’ button. If I wasn’t reviewing this story, I would want to read it. A forewords is like a synopsis which helps the reader understand the story a little more.
Plot - 12/15: You have a great plot going, but two chapters are not enough to determine the plot. I think that you should add a few more chapters to the story or at least provide an encore (that’s not the right word, but yea) to the story.
Flow -5/8: The flow was okay. It skips around on some parts, but it is still okay.
Originality/Creativity -8/12: It’s creative, but I’m not sure if it was original or not. Like I said earlier, the story is too short, so it was kind of hard to determine the originality of the story.
Characterization -4/7: With more chapters, your characters will shine. I feel that with only two chapters, everything was cramp in and the characters’ voice did not shine through.
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary -12/13: I didn’t see any major mistakes, just minor. I recommend that you read your chapter out loud, before posting it up.
Writing style -8/10: Interesting but, like I said, it lacks development of the story as a whole. You should try adding descriptions to what you are writing. It will improve your story and writing skills.
Enjoyment -3/5: It was enjoyable.
Sub total 64/100
Bonus - 5/5
Total: - 69/100: Not bad. Don’t get sadden by your score. This review is to help you and that’s all. I’m not here to nag you or hate on you, but to help you improve your writing skills. Please take what I had stated above as an example to improve your next story.
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A/N: i needed an unbiased criticism from people who love Big Bang..haha...thank you rawr!!! EXACTLY!!!!! hehehe...so happy!!!! :D:D:D i thought i'd make it longer...but i'm sick! so...it'll stay like this:D:D:D