| Fan Fiction |
by minniie
Title: 3/5
The title itself isn’t too interesting, but I watched 200 pound beauty, which I loved, and it made me more interested in the story.
Poster/background: 10/10
I think the poster and background are fitting, and they are both really cute. I’m not really a pink person, but I liked the pink theme going on.
Foreword: 7/10
The foreword was a bit repetitive, but it was interesting. Like I wrote earlier, I love the movie, so I was really looking forward to the rest of the story.
Plot: 10/15
The plot was funny and interesting, but it is very much like a lot of Cinderella type stories.
Creative/Originality: 10/15
There were a lot of interesting twists in the story, but a lot of it was a bit repetitive. In addition to using 200 pound beauty in your theme, I noticed you used a lot of stuff from Skip Beat, which is not a bad thing considering I really like both stories.
Writing style: 7/10
Your writing style isn’t so bad, but it seems kind of immature, even for a thirteen year old.
Flow: 8/10
The flow wasn’t too bad. The only real complaint I have is that when you switch the point of view to different people, there’s a lot of repetition.
Grammar/spelling/vocab: 7/10
There are no major errors, but there are some consistent minor errors in grammar and spelling.
Characterization: 5/10
All of these people sound the same. Every single one of them. If you replaced the names, I wouldn’t be able to tell because all of their personalities are so interchangeable.
Overall Enjoyment: 4/5
I really liked this story. It was the type of story I like to read.
Total = 64/100
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YAYYY~. :D... I don't have very high expectations, but at least I passedddd~!!! *parties*