| Fan Fiction |
by MKL
WELL errr, Love Like Ours ends here. <3
Do read my other stories:
The Gap Between (BeBu) - /MKL2
Crossroad (HeeDragon) - /MKL3
Lost Prince [Hyo Joo + Jae Joong (lol, how do you call their pairing? T_T] - /MKL4
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Title: Love Like Ours
Author: MKL
URL: http://winglin.net/fanfic/MKL/
Reviewer: Darkess
Title: 5/5
Up until almost the end of the story, I didn’t really think that the title fit, but I finally understood when Arron said this… “With a love like ours, who would ever want to give up?” *squeels* It’s a cute line, and it ended the story… well almost ended the story nicely.
Poster/Background: 5/10
I think it’s a little over the top, don’t you? I mean there were tons of pictures on the poster, which was perfectly fine, but putting them in the backround too… it’s just a little much. On top of those pictures, the purple text is really hard to read. I don love the picture choices though, and how there’s one of each guy, one of gui gui and them together, and then one of them hugging her. I thought It was cute <3
Forewords: 6/10
The summary is kind of interesting, but I don’t know if it is actually enough to draw the reader in, to make them want to read more.
Plot: 10/15
GAAAK, chapter 21 made me start tearing up -.- Anyways! XD Your story did flow smoothly and all, but having Wang Zi come back, and then leave again so soon… it just doesn’t seem realistic. And the hotel room in the beginning. How is it possible that the friends locked them inside of their room? I do love your story, but there were just a few shaky parts like that. Also, wouldn’t Wan g Zi be mad or sad or feel SOME emotion for leaving Gui Gui again?
Creativity/Originality: 6/10
eh, there are many stories where a girl has to pick which guy she loves more. I do really like how you did the dates and stuff though. I loved the idea of locking them in a hotel room and then how you ended the story in a hotel room…. well a hotel balcony, but almost the same thing :)
Flow: 10/10
I love it, the days are set up well, and everything is happening in a reasonable amount of time. I love how you keep a continuation going of the last chapter, instead of skipping ahead to the next day every single time.
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 8/10
Overall, you did a pretty good job with grammar, but in a few places it was just a little off.
[Chapter 21 If you don’t want it there, come back here okay?”]
this isn’t exactly grammar, but the sentence doesn’t make sense to me. Should it be if you don’t like it there? If you don’t want to live there?
[Chapter 23 She was only supposed to be next to Wang Zi but now that he’s gone, she took her place.]
That wasn’t exactly grammar, just a funny typo. You called Wang Zi a girl :P
Characterization: 8/10
I liked the pairings and the character decisions, because I knew them, and yo ucaptured there personalities well. It would be really hard to not want to be friends with Gui Gui XD but you didn’t really describe their physical features all that much, which I was disappointed by.
Writing Style: 8/10
I love how you put recaps in the beginning of almost every chapter. When I picked up reading again, I didn’t have to reread everything, and the small little bits that you picked out really helped to jog my memory XD You have things in good order, and your writing makes sense, so I liked how you wrote this story.
Overall Enjoyment: 4/5
Aww, Wang Zi totally deserved her love T,T stupid evil Arron XD I still loved your story though. I found it quite adicting and I only stopped reading once, because I had to go to bed -.- even then, I found myself thinking “Who will Gui Gui choose?” If you find that creepy…. whoops XD
Bonus: 3/5
I gave you a bonus for still continuing your story, even though around the middle you were saying that you were losing all of your readers. It’s hard to continue writing when you feel that no one is reading T.T
Total: 73/100