Reality Overdose; [Completed]
by Seo.Tai.Mi [Sung.ii.ee]
Chapter 10
Review by SueWey @ Artsy Asian Crew
Title ; Reality Overdose;
Link ; http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/Overdose/
Status ; Completed
Reviewer ; SueWey @ Artsy Asian [ http://artsyasiancrew.blogspot.com/ ]
Title 4/5
I liked your title; it’s short, simple and grabs my attention but I don’t really find it matches your story very well and there’s really no need for the ‘ ; ’ for your title.
Forewords 8/10
I liked how you started off with your forewords with the details, philosophy and so. However, I’m those kinds of reviewers who prefer authors to reveal their characters throughout the story rather than writing them out in the forewords like how you did because it could already reveal a lot on what’s going to happen in your story.
Plot 20/20
I liked your plot; it was written out well and very organized. It was very interesting to read and it wasn’t like those your-everyday-ordinary-love story.
Originality 3.5/5
I did say I like your plot but when it comes to originality, it isn’t very that original. I’m very sure that you’ve come up of this plot on your own but I’ve read something like this several times already. Plus, there are several kinds of fictions here in Winglin that includes angels as well, it’s just that the ending is either they get to be with their guy or not.
Grammar/Spelling/Transitions 13/15
I agree that everyone makes mistakes cause not everyone is perfect. But I did spot some spelling mistakes as well as grammar mistakes. No worries, they’re just some minor mistakes that everyone makes.
Flow (speed of the story) 8/10
To me, the flow of your story is somewhat a little jumpy. Maybe it’s lack of information or so?
Choice of words/Idiom/quotes 8/10
I did not see any quotes or idiom, if I’m not mistaken, in the story so I’m sorry but I have to deduct marks for that.
But, I like your choice of words. They were slightly beyond average though.
Details/Settings/Characterization 11/15
Your characterization was alright but I felt as though your description for its settings/surroundings is not enough. You focus too much on your characters. I apologize if I’m wrong but that’s just from my point of view.
Enjoyable? 10/10
I really enjoyed reading your story
It was filled with so much expression that you actually made me cried when Abby died.
Over All Score 85.5/100
______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________OH MA GAH O__O haha, never expected such a high mark OwO;;;
Thanks for taking your time to review!