| Fan Fiction |
by PinkishBubble
Title: 4 out of 5
I see why you used this title. It sums up what your story is all about. I knocked off a point because of wrong grammar. When you say "Cupid: Angel's in Misson" is like saying "Cupid: Angel is in Mission" which I know isn't what you were intending to mean. If I am not mistaken, you meant "Cupid: Angel on a Mission", right? Either than that, I love your title.
Forewords: 6 out of 10
I guess you don't have a forewords. Well, I based it on the "epilogue" you wrote as a chapter one. Forewords is to sum up the story in the beginning of the book/fanfic. Usually, it can be done by a teaser or short beginning. You really didn't do that, but you introduced what could be the conflict of the story by the "epilogue" itself. So I gave you points for that.
Poster/Background : 7 out of 10
Love the poster. It didn't really held the mood and tone of your story, but I know you had your reasons for choosing things the way they are.
Plot: 19 out of 20
Angels falling in love with demons. Good plotline. It was catchy and interesting throughout. It only got cliche when about the forbidden love, but you wrote it exquistely that I really didn't mind it that much.
Creativity/Originality: 14 out of 15
Very original and very creative. I would have never thought of a love story between an angel and a demon. Although we all heard about forbidden love, the way you encompassed it in a totally orignial setting made it amazing. Great job!
Flow: 4 out of 5
No major flow problems. It just felt it went too fast for me though.
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 2 out of 5
You had plenty of grammar, vocabulary, and spelling mistakes. For example, sains = science and aints = ants are just a few mistakes you made. For the grammar and vocabulary, i guess it was just your choice of words that made them sound awkward.
Characterization/Detail: 5 out of 10
There wasn't much detail about your characters. There were times you described them, but there were only a handful of those times.
Writing Style: 7 out of 10
I like your writing style, but there are some points for improvement. As I tell everyone, each person has a unique style of writing. You've found yours. You just gotta improve and perfect it. :)
Overall Enjoyment: 9 out of 10
I really enjoyed your story. Thank you for letting me read it. :)
Total: 77 out of 100
Bouns: 5 out of 5 ( i have my reasons )
(1) Is because the review was late. (2) Is because you requested from us. (3) I've never read a story like yours before.
GRAND TOTAL: 82 out of 100