Fan Fiction

She Will Come Back [ONE-SHOT ; COMPLETED*]

by BoBoLi0us

Chapter 2

Review from Exculpate Delusion

Title: She Will Come Back
Author: BoBoLi0us
Fanfic URL:http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/Reminiscence01/
Reviewer:myangelteuk@exculpate-delusion.blogspot.com

Story Title 7/8-Nice title.It fits with the story.

Appearance 10/12-You made the poster, right?Its pretty!But the background's kind of plain.

Forewords 9/10-I know you right the forewords like this.(I'm one of your silent readers)But the thing is, you need to put some information about the reader and Taec.

Plot 15/15-The plot is nice!I read one fanfic like this before and never get bored with it because she added twists and turns.

Flow 8/8-It wasn't slow or fast.It was at the right pace.

Originality/Creativity 11/12-Like I said, I've read some

Characterization 7/7-I like the fact that you didn't just throw the characters at one scene.

Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary 12/13-The only thing I saw wrong is 'than' and 'then'.
Than means: A particle expressing comparison, used after certain adjectives and adverbs which express comparison or diversity, as more, better, other, otherwise, and the like.
Then means:Soon afterward, or immediately; next; afterward.

Writing style 10/10-I like your writing style!Its understandable and readable!What more do you need!

Enjoyment 4/5-Since it was obvious, because of the title it kind of spoiled the ending but I still enjoyed it!

Sub total 93/100

Bonus 5/5-Good luck!And write more!

Total: 98/100

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Thank you!