| Fan Fiction |
by cutterpillow ♥ CMH
Hey! First of all thanks for requesting a review from Seasonal Wishes, and especially from me!
I know it may look mean [or not] and all but it’s more of a time where we tell you where you can improve if needed right? ^^
Title: 4/5
I love your title; it gives off the feeling of things like Romance and some comedy and such, but no full marks, seeing as it sort of didn’t match to the story and plot.
Background/Poster: 10/10
It’s simple and it draws a lot of attention on who’s going to be in it, and I’m not lying when I say I really like it! Simple and easy to read off. Your background is the same. It doesn’t mess with the text and doesn’t strain the eyes.
Forewords:9 /10
It’s finely detailed and once it’s been read it’s easy to tell how you’ve planned this very well. Kudos on the legend too!
Plot: 9/15
Your plot seems over used, and when I say that, it means that it’s been used so many times I actually knew what was going to happen in the end. Surely enough they did end up together, which was good, but you could have used a bit more that 1 to 2 twists, even changed it a bit more. All in all job well done on the plot.
Creativity/Originality: 9/15
As I said, it’s an overused but it was pretty ok, but maybe next time use some of that creativity and make a totally different kind of plot and amaze so many people! I know you can.
Flow: 10/10
It worked out well; you didn’t end up twisting it too much so it didn’t get question like “how come...” and “what happen to...” if you get me. It went around the obstacles of ad-libs and characters that didn’t need to be there. Thumbs up on that!
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 7.5 /10
Seeing as your first language ISN’T English I’ll cut you some slack, but I do want to say that you could of at least re-checked your work for small spelling, grammar and punctuation mistakes on word doc. or attempt to search for editors. But other than that, I knew what you had written and what you were trying to say.
Characterization: 9/10
Simple yet they give so much off by their simple dialogue and description.
Writing Style: 9/10
It’s nice to see that even though your first language isn’t English you haven’t used script writing, and also whose point of view it is. I knew when you started and ended the chapter and also when it’s a flash-back or not.
Overall enjoyment: 4/5
I actually grew interested by looking at the poster and the amount given. But once read it became as I said an overused plot, over all it’s great!
Sub Total: 80.5/100
Bonus: 3/5
Credits to creators and reviewers: 2
Total: 83.5/100
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posted: 09.15.09
THANK YOU PaleFiloRaeRae of Seasonal wishes :)