| Fan Fiction |
by cutterpillow ♥ CMH
Reviewer: EMI
Title: 5/5: This title is great; it gives you first impressions, but not a clue what’s going on. Also, it has a melancholy feel to it, and you think the wrong thing (I personally thought it was one of those stories about bitchy girls, ha, ha.).
Poster/Background: 8/10: No need to say anything on this. The background was nice and clear, and the poster was nicely made.
Forewords: 9/10: This was simple and good and introduced the characters.
Plot: 10/15: The plot was something very similar to me, but I still liked it. It wasn’t that complicated, but it was overall, alright.
Creativity/Originality: 5/10: I’ve read so many stories like yours before, so I kind of knew the ending. Lol, this reminded me somewhat of Mean Girls. ._.’’
Flow: 8/10: The flow is alright—not too fast, not too slow, although being so quickly obsessed with a guy might be ‘too fast’ to some people.
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 7/10: The grammar and the vocabulary really need fixing. O_o Try to use the dictionary, thesaurus, or spell check more often.
Characterization: 10/10: The characters are amazing. Haruma is the typical boy who can’t decide what to do, and the girl is the typical girl who just can’t fit in with anybody but her two best friends (BTW, what’s with groups of three? Is it that fitting?) When they were sad, I felt sad too.
Writing Style: 10/10: Your writing style was great, and easy to decipher and read.
Overall Enjoyment: 5/5
Bonus: 5/5
Total: 82/100
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DP: 09.20.09
THANK YOU EMI of http://emientertainment.webs.com ! I thought I would received another low score. LOL.