| Fan Fiction |
by cutterpillow ♥ CMH
Note: Know that I do not know the author and vice versa, he or she doesn’t know me. I have nothing against her and neither should he or she. This review is just to help the author in improving his or her skills in writing and be able to make further improvements later on in the future.
Title: 4/5
The title was simple, but it was unique. It kind of matched your plot and it kind of didn't. I liked it. :)
Overall Appearance: 10/10
The colour blue matched well with your story since it was cute. It was good that the characters were included. The poster is amazing, and same goes for the background.
Forewords: 10/10
The forewords definitely caught my attention. It was well written and it made me want to read your story.
Plot: 9/15
I've seen many similar stories, so it was pretty easy to guess what was going on and what was going to happen next. It was kind of cliché, but I have to admit that it was pretty cute.
Creativity/Originality: 10/15
As I've said, I've read many similar stories. But there were some parts that were really creative.
Flow: 9/10
The flow wasn't too fast nor too slow. I didn't feel like you were rushing.
Spelling/Grammar/Vocab.: 13/15
There were a lot of grammar errors. You should re-read it over before posting it. But your vocabulary was fine. I understand that English is not your first language, therefore I did not take off too much points.
Writing Style: 8/10
Well everyone has their own writing style. Some use dialogue form and others paragraph form. I personally like the paragraph form. So I really like your style, it was very easy to read too.
Overall Enjoyment: 8/10
I enjoyed reading the forewords, but I was kind of disappointed when I read the story. But I still enjoyed it. :)
Total: 81/100
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DP: 09.23.09
thanks UnknownViet :)