| Fan Fiction |
by cutterpillow ♥ CMH
Title: 4/5 The title was kinda exciting and fun ! You would know exactly what the story would be and that's an advantage making readers more interested and excited about your story.
Poster/Background: 3/5 The poster was fun to look at especially seeing Ro-Chan smiling evilly as for Haru-Chan, His face seems like he fell into a misfortune or bad luck. Love it !
Forewords: 5/10 Your forewords were alright but it still wasn't enough and was lacking more information & questions about your story that would double or triple the interests of your readers. Try to work on that, Add more.
Plot: 14/15 Like I said, Your story is fun and exciting so as your plot ! I like the way how they got stuck and cleaned the museum for weeks and would start to like each other. Movies, You watch to many dramas my friend :) Just by reading the first few parts of your chapters then I knew were you were going but, I got you there. Very Impressive !
Originality: 18/20 Well, You managed to make it your very own so I'll give you a score of 18 over 20. You deserve it :)
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation/Vocabulary: 8/15 I'm still not contented with your spelling and grammar. You may misspell SMALL words but, Doesn't BIG words starts with SMALL ones and it just became big and complicated ? Although it really isn't a MAJOR error so far while I'm reviewing, But I advise you to work on your vocabulary.
Detail: 4/5 It wasn't over, It was pretty much normal. ^^
Writing Style: 10/10 Just focus on your spelling & grammar cause you have nothing to worry about this. But sometimes I get confused with your writing to who is talking or to whom is referring to. Make it clear next time and try to include their names after "Their conversation."
Overall Enjoyment: 9/10 Honestly, I had fun reading your story ! :)
Bonus: 5/5 Cutterpillow, Thanks you for choosing me to review your story. ^^
Final score: 80/100
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DP: 10.22.09
Thank you Ronix ^^