Fan Fiction

The One She Picks *COMPLETED*

by Angel_in_pain502 aka Tina

Chapter 23

Review

Award: Distinction
Reviewer: Yvonne
Status of FF: Completed

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Details

1* title - 8 Marks
Remarks: Simple title but it did attract my attention to read it.Besides that it also suits the story.

2* forewords - 5 Marks
Remarks:Nothing much in your forewards besides the fact that you changed their names and stated it there.You should have inserted their personalities and so on in there.

3* Poster/bg - 10 Marks
Remarks: Your poster and background match perfectly.It's really nice.

4* Originality & creativity - 8 Marks
Remarks: Amazing idea you have.I've never read a story with such a serious love triangle

5* Language - 7 Marks
Remarks: I immediately spotted an error in the first chapter,first sentence.That didn't give me a good impression. "The snow blurted down" what do you mean by blurted down???

6* reader friendly - 8 Marks
Remarks: Your font colour and your background doesn't clash and you provided enough description for the readers to understand the story better.

7* Plot - 8 Marks
Remarks: Interesting plot,great job.

8* Story Flow - 8 Marks
Remarks: Your story flow is going at the perfect pace,not too fast and not too slow.You take things one at a time instead of rushing it or dragging the thing a little too long that you bore the readers.

9* Writing Style - 8 Marks
Remarks: Nothing much to say,you spaced out the contents neatly instead of having it all in one big chunk..

10* additional Points - 10 Marks
Remarks: I enjoyed reading your story.Good job

Total Score: 80/100

Credit to Yvone from Delicrious. =D