| Fan Fiction |
by Andra
Title: 6/10
Nothing special about the title.
Poster/Background: 5/10
The poster is alright, however, the biggest problem is with the background, it seriously clashes with the font’s color. I have to highlight each word just to read. It would be hard for readers who have poor eyesight.
Cast: 3/5
Choices of the cast are bands, so their chemistry should be great, however, in this story, I cannot see the tightly knitted relationship.
Foreword: 7/10
It’s still acceptable, you slightly introduced the characters, and however, the problem mainly revolves around the font color and background. Bad choices caused the foreword to look dull and unappetizing.
Originality and creativity: 7/10
Haven’t seen any stories quite like yours. However, I feel that you should churn more of your brain juices, your creativity in the story haven’t been stretched to the maximum.
Story and Plot: 16/20
Uninteresting. It doesn’t make me feel like reading it.
Flow: 7/10
Very stiff. It’s just like describing an extremely usual day. Even if there was any action, it has been pulled down.
Writing style: 8/10
I haven’t come upon any writer who writes like you.
Spelling, Grammar and Vocabulary: 7/10
Uh-oh, there are quite a handful of spelling mistakes, very little vocabulary, sentences doesn’t flow.
Overall enjoyment: 3/5
I can’t give you more points as I kept yawning throughout the whole story.
Bonus: 3/5
I’m afraid that this is all I can give.
Reviewer comment:
I feel that your story lacks emotions. Everything is described like a chore. For example, (I made up my own.) “She smashed the window with a rock. She slumped down and cried.” You should emphasize on the relationships connected between them. However cold a person may be, when it comes to someone they truly love, there would still be a hint of love in between. There’s still room for improvement, thus, keep it up!
Total: 72/100 (including b-pts.)