Housemate [ COMPLETE ]
by Aquilla
Chapter 18
REVIEW
Housemate by Aquilla
Reviewer: Sakura
Title: 8/10
Your title fits perfectly with your story. It describes the main part of the plot and everything.
Poster/Bg: 7/10
You have an awesome poster and your background is good. But maybe you could use a font color that will stand out against your background so it will be easier to see.
Forewords: 7/10
You explained how you are writing the story, and that was good. You could have added some information about the story though.
Plot: 12/15
Your plot is pretty good. It's not as predictable as most, but it still has some parts where you can predict what will happen next.
Creativity/Originality: 11/15
There were some parts that were not very new, but then there was some parts that I had never heard of before. Not bad!
Writing Style: 6/10
You said in the forewords that it was going to be like a script, but the format is more like dialogue instead of a script. A script format should look more like this:
TaeYeon: So these are the last boxes?
You: Y-Yes, that's the last one.
TaeYeon: You are lucky enough to be able to rent a good apartment near the city. Moreover, it’s cheap. How lucky can you be?
You also have some grammar problems, but you are already aware of that, so it's okay.
Flow: 7/10
Your story flowed pretty well. There weren't parts that seemed out of place or unconnected to the rest of the story.
Overall Enjoyment: 10/15
Bonus: 2/5
TOTAL: 70/100
Hm... gotta do better next time!