| Fan Fiction |
by asianCUHH
Title: 5/5
Your title suits your story very well!
Forewords: 7/10
Your forewords gave me a little idea about what your story is all about but you should atleast introduce your characters.
Poster/Background: 7/10
Your colors have light colors that perfectly suit your story.I like yuri's picture!But I think Donghae's picture doesn't fit the poster.As for your background,I like it but the word "Should I love you or let go" somewhat made me hard to read words in your story.
Plot: 18/20
I quite like your plot.I am glad that you didn't include too much mushy scenes..kekeke..because if you did,it will completely ruin your story!..But something really wonders me..ummm..sorry if I missed that part or something but I want to know what did Khun did after Yuri saw him and a girl making out.Khun should have atleast go after Yuri.But this is your story right?I don't have the right to infer with it :P
Creativity/Originality: 9/10
Although this kind of stories is very common for the others,it is still unique for me.
Flow: 2/5
Sorry but the flow of your story is fast.And it's a bit draggy.You story was like love-quarrel-love-quarrel.But I know you can still improve on it:)
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 8/10
I can see some words that has a missing letter.Maybe you are in a rush while typing.But don't worry you don't have too much wrong grammars.Just improve some words and try using some more 'deep' words.
Characterization/Details: 10/10
I like your characterization!I love Yuri's character here.Donghae's character suits him.Khun's character suits him too!!!
Writing Style: 9/10
Writing in a script form was okay.You have written chapter neatly:)
Overall Enjoyment: 4/5
Sub Total: 84/100
Bonus: 4/5
Total: 88/100
I enjoyed reading this story!I heard this story has a sequel well,good luck on your sequel!Just request to us when you want a request.Hope you can improve more.Good Luck!!!:D
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