| Fan Fiction |
by Xiao Wen
Title: 5/5
Fits the story well! ^^
Forewords- 6/10
I understood the plot, but I took points off for no introduction of characters. Plus, it wasn't as engaging, so if I were a normal reader, I don't think I would be completely compelled to press the next button.
Plot- 18/20
It's a good plot! I liked it, and romance stories like this are very cute. :)
Originality- 3/5
I've seen stories like this before. But it is year 2010, so completely original plots are super super hard to come by.
Grammar/Spellings/Transitions- 9/15
The grammar was hard to understand, but that's your style I guess. I saw some spelling mistakes, but not so overwhelming that there was a mistake in every sentence or anything. Transition from one scene to the next was good though.
Flow- 5/10
The flow of the writing was kind of choppy.
Choice of Words/Idioms/Quotes 5/10
Your choice of words was pretty simple, but easy to understand! The quotes in the forwards were good, just some slight grammar mistakes. Not many quotes.
Details/Settings/Characterization 10/15
Your characterization was strange, but it fit the plot.
Enjoyable 5/10
I'm sorry, but too many elements distracted me from the actual story. ><
Over All Score 66/100
Bonus 4/5
Sorry for the low score. I'm just trying to help, don't be offended!