stupid and idiotic lovestory (ONE SHOT COMPLETED)

by sam

Chapter 4

REVIEW by yunni at yesoveryen

Title: 3/5
I see the connection between the fic and your title, but too long of one can turn a reader off. It would have been better if the title was shorter. Also, don't forget to capitalize!

Poster/Background: 10/10
Nicely done, neat, tidy, and fitted the story well.

Forewords: 10/10
Included information about your fic and your characters. Not only that, but a short introduction to yourself, so full marks.

Plot: 7/15
I see a lot of these plots, and frankly, while I was reading it, I was thinking, 'Oh, goodness. Here we go again.'

Creativity/Originality: 15/15
Extremely original. That was one thing that made this story interesting, because there were a LOT, and I mean a LOT of elements that were out of this world and was extraordinarily creative. For example, Ella's mechanical hand helpers. Their functions cracked me up like no tomorrow. Hebe's personality was hilarious and never failed to make me laugh, especially when she was cheering for Chun and beating Arron up! ...Not that I'm sadistic or anything, I just found it hilarious. XD Good job~!

Flow: 10/10
Even, steady pace and not lost even once. ^^

Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 4/10
Meow. Capitalization, usage of apostrophes, commas, quotation marks, and periods. Grammatical mistakes are also present throughout.

Characterization: 10/10
I felt like I understood each character's personality well, and each of them had their own distinctive personality. While Ella was the emotionless one, Hebe was the bright, perky, cute one! Yeah, I found her personality extremely cute, hahaha. So cute! Like a little kid! -squishes cheeks- ...Okay. -ahem-

Writing Style: 6/10
Original, but CAN be confusing at parts- although it didn't disrupt the flow of the story.

Overall Enjoyment: 3/5
I just love reading Hebe's parts, they're HILARIOUS. XD

Sub Total: 78/100

Bonus: 2/5

Total: 80/100
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thanks yunni!:))