| Fan Fiction |
by QiaoKeLi
Title: Test Of Love
Author: QiaoKeLi
Link: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/cremecaramel/
Reviewer: Eureka !
Title: 8/10
Ah, the title was eye-catching and let’s on a gist of the story to the reader(s). But the title doesn’t take full effort until later in the story.
Characters: 3/5
Eh, what can I say? Chun & Ella pairings are VERY common. But hey, I like it! Also, it would be better if you worked harder on the characterisation of your characters instead of just what they say.
Foreword: 6/10
The foreword was GOOD to the extent that it shares a bit of the story synopsis. Personally, I would have liked it more if it was more … Organised. Next time, I suggest writing just a little prologue for the story instead of somewhat telling the readers the story-plot.
Poster & Background: 10/10
Omg, you don’t know how much I love the poster. It’s so pretty with all the different shades of blue ~ And the background compliments the colour of the text [it’s not hard to read!].
Plot: 10/15
Your plot consisted of many unnecessary things and there’s not a lot of movement with the CE couple in the earlier chapters [or anything for that matter]. You places cliffhangers at inappropriate places and they weren’t really a cliffhanger and you should also try and fasten the pace of the story but not to the extent that you cram things into a chapter.
Originality: 10/15
I deducted marks for your originality as you used too many over-used plots like the ‘husband gets text from girl and wife gets jealous’ and the ‘wife gets unexpected pregnancy’. Try to use more twists and turns that other authors haven’t and blend your own mix into it. Try to steer away from all the stereotypes.
Language: 9/15
I can’t say it’s perfect nor can I say it’s really bad – it’s in between. Your spelling is ok, but your punctuation and grammar is quite bad. Learn to edit your word, or get someone to edit it for you. Please try and describe scenes and the such instead of just listing them out. You tend to mix past and present tenses together. I picked up many mistakes throughout the story so I suggest you re-read it and fix them up.
I know you mentioned that you’re not good at English but that’s not really an excuse for not brushing up on it. Oh, and just for future references, don’t use more than one exclamation mark; it just makes it look really messy. ONE MORE THING, PLEASE DON’T RANDOMLY PUT CAPITAL LETTERS OR COMMAS ON OR BEHIND WORDS.
Overall: 12/15
It actually wasn’t THAT bad but I bet you could have done better. I’m not much of a one-liner [or a fan of script form writing] so my interest for your story dropped a bit. I loved the duet that CE sang ~ Gah, it was so sweet!
Bonus: 5/5
You caught me in a happy mood so I’m giving you full bonus marks. I also liked the poem on Chapter 26 ~ It was very captivating even though you didn’t write it.
Total: 75/100
I really didn’t want to be harsh as your original mark was 71. But after some careful thinking, I thought you deserved more and added 4 extra marks on. Don’t get discouraged by this as you really did try hard; I could see it in your Author’s Notes. Jia You ~~
- Eureka!
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A/N: thank's Eureka for reviewing my story.=)