| Fan Fiction |
by ctineh0.
Title 4/5:
The title is somewhat interesting but for me personally it wasn’t eye catching. I thought it would be one of those simple love stories. But it really matches the storyline.
Poster/Background 8/10:
It’s really pretty but I can’t really see the people much? Maybe it’s because I’m bind haha. The background didn’t interfere with the font so it was really easy to read. I didn’t have to highlight over the font. :]
Forewords 8/10:
I’ll be frank with you, it was really…confusing. So far you’re making your story sound really cliché. The enemy turning into lover? It’s actually quite common. I also think the jerk turning into Romeo is the same as enemy turning into lover. But you described the characters really well. Just remember not to reveal too much about the story. You want the readers want for more and anticipating what’s going to happen next.
Plot 12/15:
It wasn’t extravagant or thrilling but simply…simple? I must say there weren’t many cliff hangers that I was expecting. But it was somewhat worth while? The plot was too cliché. But it’s very good for those who love to read those school girl fantasy stories.
Creativity/Originality 12/15:
Wasn’t very original. I thought G-Dragon being the player was too common. It wasn’t quite creative but it was good.. It was a typical love story.
Flow 7/10:
I thought the plot was too… uhmm draggy? It went by real slow plus the number of chapters. But in all it was okay. Each chapter was somewhat entertaining.
Spelling/Grammar/Vocab. 9/10:
I saw some spelling mistakes and some other problems but other then that everyone went smoothly. I only had a problem with your ‘kuhsz’ part. You used it a lot o.o!
Writing Style 7/10:
Your writing style is unique but there were times when my eyes deceived me. Too much caps. For example: CHRISTINE : " UGGHHH !! LIFE IS BEING SO UNFAIR TO ME AT THIS MOMENT -.- " The name is caps and what she’s saying is also caps so I thought someone was saying “CHRISTINE UGHHHH-” If your going to make it script style you might want to try to make sure to make the names stand out. Just a suggestion.
Chracterizations 9/10:
You were really descriptive. Though at times I got confused since you kept switching names. Like English to Korean.
Overall Enjoyment 4/5:
Although I’m not a HUGE fan of Big Bang, I occasionally listen to their music. Your story was good. Actually it was the first Big Bang story I read that I actually finished. :D. There were times when I got confused but it was all good. I must say though your story is the dreams of every school girl. The hot popular guy liking you? It’s everyone’s fantasy isn’t it? Whew! I finished your story :] Overall for me your story was good :].
Total 80/100
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wow. i read the review on my sidekick and i'm updating on my sidekick. so it's hard. i have to go back and forth -.-
lmao, but the review really taught me.
it's in the 80's , so i'm happy. really, i am.
but come on, everyone is unhappy when they get a review criticizing your story, right? i was shocked hearing and reading the review, but really, it's just something that can teach you and just give you tips on how to improve and become a better writer.
so that's all i have to say, and thank you LOVEY-DOVEY for reading my story and giving it a good review! thanks(:
-ctineh0
updated_
august 25th 2008
at 3:06PM