| Fan Fiction |
by ctineh0.
Title: 5/5
I think your title is good; it makes the story sound very interesting. The title drew me into the story instead of the characters. Good job!
Forewords: 7/10
It was orginaized and descriptive. There was a whole lot of information with the characters and might over excite the readers. The Forewords or preview to the story was simple and gave me a little of what I was going to reader throughout the story.
Appearance: 9/10
The poster is beautiful and the background was nice and pale so the font could be read. But the background could have a bit more color to it, just to make the font pop more.
Plot: 17/20
The plot of this story was refreshing. It was comical and dramatic, an overall story in my eyes. It original, but not that original, in other words, I've read stuff like it.
Characterisation: 13/15
I loved the cast used in this story, but they could've been better portrayed. Meaning, they could've been given more life. But overall, good work.
Language: 8/10
You're language skills are good, I did spot a couple spelling and grammar mistakes here and there throughout the story. But that's to be expected. I would greatly suggest you re-read your work, like I say to everyone else, try to get someone else read it for you after you did so yourself. That way there's a greater chance of fixing mistakes.
Flow: 10/10
The flow was evenly paced, flowed smoothly.
Writing Style: 10/10
I like you're writing style, so nothing to worry about here.
Overall enjoyment: 10/10
I really enjoyed this story~! I honestly got sad when there was no more. Please make that sequel!
Bonus: 2/3
You don't really converse with your readers much, but it was sweet of you to thank you're constant source of support in the end of the series.
Total: 91/100
C O M M E N T : I'm so sorry this took so long, but I hope you're satisfied with the results. Again so sorry it took forever.
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i think this is my best one yet! (:
SO I'M HAPPY. happy that i got my review with a good score, and happy that i updated one of my fanfics.
i didn't really get a chance to update the sequel, so i apologize!
THANK YOU KISS-THE-RADIO for reviewing my story even when you're on hiatus! (=
my sequel link is :
www.winglin.net/fanfic/RBY/
updated __
august 27th 2008
at 6:30PM