Fan Fiction

My Dream - one shot- [Completed]

by D14

Chapter 4

Review from Lonesome Sprint

Title: My Dream
Author: D14
URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/d14_1shot/
Reviewer: dramafreak4eva @ Lonesome Sprint
[lonesomesprint.blogspot.com]

Title: 3/5
- I found your title interesting and it did suit the fanfiction but it wasn’t catchy.

Background/Poster: 8/10
- I liked your poster as I thought it did actually suit the mood.

Forewords: 7/10
- I thought you were forewords was plain and simple but a little more information would do.

Plot: 14/15
- I REALLY loved your plot. It was excellent! It was really funny in the end where I [Reader] woke up and found out it was all one dream but when I went to the living room and found out my parents were talking to a mid-age couple, I seriously bursted into laughter. Overall, I absolutely loved it.

Creativity/Originality: 13/15
- It was creative for sure! I never ever came through a fanfiction with an ending like that before! Seriously, I thought it was very exciting to read.

Speed/Flow: 9/10
- The speed flow overall was good but I thought the part where Yunho asked I [Reader] to get married was a tiny bit fast. Other then that, It was perfect!

Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 10/10
- I gave full marks because I didn’t find any mistakes that were actually major ones.

Characterisation: 10/10
- I loved your characterisation! It was explained really well.

Writing Style: 10/10
- Full marks because I loved it and I have nothing else to say other then that.

Overall enjoyment: 4/5
- I am not a major fan [Not yet though] of DBSK, just a minor one but this fanfiction is one that I really enjoyed.

Sub Total: 88/100

Bonus: 2/5
- Because you requested from Lonesome Sprint ;D
- Because it was a fanfiction that I really did enjoy reading.

Total: 90/100
Great job and good luck on your future fanfictions/one shots!

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thanks alot for Lonesomesprint.blogspot.com for granting my request
and dramafreak4eva for reviewing my story.. ^^