| Fan Fiction |
by UnknownViet
- Appearance 8/12
The poster is indeed, very gorgeous. The quote on your poster is touching, but I think you could make a change of it. Instead of putting "marks" maybe try "represent"? The white and hot pink spots on the side, I really don't think it's necessary. The poster already kind of tells us this story might have a tragic ending, but the spots brightens up the mood. The background is too light, it'll be better if it's slightly darker.
- Forewords 9/10
The forewards clearly tells us what's happening between the main character and the guy, and the definition of The End. Just by reading the forewards, it already catches me and wanting to continue reading on. Wondering why you lost a point for this part? Really, I could've given you full marks. But the review scores that were joint with the forewards, it might be better if you left them with the reviewing comments. (:
- Plot 12/15
The plot is common, but you made it slightly different by making the character starting a new life.
- Flow 5/8
I was expecting more. I want to know how she moved on, it'll be more interesting if you added at least one more chapter to tell us about her "new" life.
- Originality/Creativity 11/12
It's unique how you chose The End to be the start of something new. People who haven't read this story, would probably think it's the end of some kind of relationship in the conclusion.
- Characterization 3/7
You could've described more about their character, like their attitudes and so forth. You said Lee Chi Hoon changed, but how?
- Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary 11/13
There weren't much errors throughout the chapter, but there were a few. You seem to be having trouble when it comes to the word "just", which you spelt as "jsut" twice. You should read over carefully. Also, there were unnecessary fullstops. They could be replaced with commas instead.
- Writing style 7/10
You can describe things clearly, but not deep enough to position the reader to feel what Lee Yun Joo is feeling.
- Enjoyment 4/5
After all, I really enjoyed reading your story. You lost a point, I really want to read more about her new life!
Sub total: 76/100
Bonus: 2/5
Total: 78/105 (74/100)
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Reviewed by JENNiSM_