| Fan Fiction |
by Estee
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Poster&Background: 10/10
I really liked your poster and background.. it was simple... it did not have too much on it
Foreword: 8/10
Your forewords were fairly well done, but we were only able to understand Hebe, and not as much of the other characters.
Cast Used: 4/5
please remember that this part is a very biased proportion :D
okay.. i personally love the pairing here as for
selina - jiro
hebe - arron
chun - ella
it was nice and simple not too many characters
Originality & Creativity/ Story and Plotting: 30/35
i liked it... not a lot of stories add the "best friends" getting engaged, and it so happens they are together... it was VERY cute...
the only thing i do not like is the fact that Hebe got pregnant... it was very expected...
but in general it was fairly well done
for the plot i would say it is nice but the ending was not so good
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 10/10
i would say your spelling and grammar was perfect :D
i probably would do a lot worse haha
good job... proof reading :D
Pace Of Story: 8/10
I just loved the pace of your story. It wasn't rushed nor dragged for the most part UNTILL THE END
the END WAS VERY RUSHED O.o
Writing Style: 8/10
it was very welll written but!
the problem was sometimes it was really close together.. and it makes it a bit hard to read
it made my head spin... after reading it for a while it was like @.@
Overall Enjoyment: 9/10
AGAIN! very biased
I really did enjoy your story! I enjoyed reading it.
remember the words
OVERALL enjoyment.. there were a few chapters that were.. ehhh bleh... but in general VERY WELL DONE
TOTAL: 87/100
Reviewed by: hunnie<3
www.freewebs.com/wintersunshine
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Thanks for the review. (:
I really appreciate it!
I agree that the ending is rushing. I hate endings! I don't know how to finish my ending. ALWAYS! :(
I will continue to work hard for my next fanfic. :D