| Fan Fiction |
by -n3ya08-
Forewords: - 7/10
It didn't make me want to click on the next button right away, but it was intrigueing. ^^ I took off points because you didn't introduce the characters so readers aren't confused.
Poster/Background : - 9/10
It's cute! I love the quotes, they're cute. :) It was a bit big though, so I had to scroll down a lot to read the story. The backround was eye appeasing, and didn't distract from the text.
Plot: - 12/ 20
I've seen a lot of plots like these, but I liked how you used it. It's a cute story, I enjoyed reading it. ^^
Creativity/Originality: - 9/15
Like I said, I've seen a lot of plots like this, but you added some twists that made it uniquely yours! Plus, it's 2010, so a lot of creative ideas have been used. ^o^
Flow: - 3/5
I thought it was rushed at times, but that's it. :)
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: - 2/5
I noticed a lot of mistakes, but I still understood what was going on. ^^ Try to use more vocab, and maybe you can ask someone to beta your story. :)
Characterization/Detail: - 10/10
You portrayed them perfectly for their roles! Good job!
Writing Style: - 7/10
See spelling/grammar/voc and flow.
Overall Enjoyment: - 8/10
I like these kinds of plots. ^^ Nice story, I wasn't bored. Just work on your grammar and flow. That's the only flaw. :)
Total: - 67/100
Bonus: - 4/5
Sorry for the harsh review! I'm just trying to help. ><