| Fan Fiction |
by SeventhStar
Title : 3/5
The title isn’t very catchy, but its relatively unique and gives a clear suggestion on what the story is going to be about.It's fit the story.
Poster/Background: 8/10
The background/poster is quite ok.The Poster is indeed very well made and it most definitely suits the mood of the story. The poster is relevant to the story.
Forewords: 9/10
Very nice foreword! It lets the readers have a preview of the story, and introduced the characters nicely.Your forewords are very informative; everything seems to be there that should be.
Plot: 13/15
You got an interesting plot there. I like it. But, try not to make it so confusing, ok?
Creativity/Originality: 13/15
I could tell that this is very original by just reading the story.Your story is interesting to read.Keep up the good work!
Writing Style: 10/10
You didn’t write in script format, but you used a lot of one-liners. Good job! Plus, having flashbacks in between their conversations were very clever!
Flow: 8/10
Your story had a nice flow between characters and I see the effort you put into describing each character's story. But again, some places were confusing and hard to interpret.try to improve on it.
Spelling/Grammar/Vocab: 10/10
Your vocabulary is good! I hardly spotted any errors while reading your story.
Characterization: 9/10
You described the characters quite well.But, you did not introduce them properly. So, sometimes, it'll make readers blur.
Overall Enjoyment: 4/5
Honestly,I enjoyed your story.I have fun reading it, but there are some parts that are confusing. So, i can't understand it some times.
But, it could be improved! Try Harder!
Total points: 87/100
Additional Comments:
Remember! You can be the best! More practice!! Jia You! It may still improve! Keep Trying!
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[Author's Note]: Thanks for the review.... I noticed you say my vocabulary is good but you dont touch my grammar's side... lol. It will decreased my score if you spotted... Anyway thank you for the review... for the part that you confused... I could understand... lol.. Thanks once again >_<