| Fan Fiction |
by appleMIN
Title: 5/5
It really catches my attention which is really good~ It reminds me of one of those directors who suddenly shout, "And...cut!"
Background/Poster: 10/10
OMG, not just the fact that Sung Min was in it, but it was really good and nicely done~ It's really easily read and the text coloring is very matching~ Great job~~
Forewords: 10/10
I liked the two different point of view letters, it was really good~ I almost thought about crying if I had to keep reading about it.... >.< It was really detailed and I love how you introduced the characters and what was going on through those letters~
Plot: 14/15
It was similar to many stories I know, about losing her memory but you gave it a twist so that was good~
Creativity/Originality: 13/15
Definitely creative and original. I just feel a bit of nostalgia within it~ It's fine though, you gave it a bittersweet twist~
Speed/Flow: 9/10
it's a one-shot, I've been there and making the speed as good as possible is harder than it seems. However, I think the flow of the time was a bit little-detailed. Sometimes I felt that I wasn't really in a different time, but that could be due to the lack of characterization for a certain time.
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 9/10
I believe you had small grammar problems. For example: "I love you," he said. The 'he' should be lower-cased and the period that is supposed to be after 'you' should become a comma when you're trying to say 'he said/cried/yelled/etc.'
Characterisation: 8/10
I wish there were more description of the place that they are in and the person themselves too. It'd be also good to put in who is speaking at times so that the reader's know who is speaking at which dialogue.
Writing Style: 9/10
It was neat and perfect, the way I like it and the way it it's readable for others as well~
Overall enjoyment: 5/5
Aw~ It was sooooo good~
Sub Total: 92/100
Bonus:5/5
Total: 97
It's was overall very well done~
I loved the story~~~~~
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Thank you :D
glad you enjoyed it ^^~