| Fan Fiction |
by Hainexazien
Title: 4/5
I thought the title matched the story fairly well.
Forewords: 10/10
Perfect! i thought the forewords were very well written and had enough description to keep readers guessing what going to happen.
Plot: 16/20
It seemed a little hard for me to imagine Li Xin deciding to just live with Le Cai.
Originality: 8/10
The storyline is one that is not commonly used among other fanfics i have read. Especially the characters. I wasn't used to reading different names of the characters. So it was a challenge for me to read it while mixing up the names. But eventually i got used to it.
Style of Your Writing: 14/15
Well typed, and not in script form.
Spelling, Grammar, and Punctuation: 13/15
I saw a few grammar, spelling, and puncuation mistakes. but nothing too serious. But i did spot one mistake that bothered me a little.
Example: Chapter 8
"...I looked up at him. "You don't understand, my life, Wen Jun, you don't understand any of it!..."
In this you wrote 'Wen Jun' but i think you really meant to put Le Cai.
Descriptions and Word Choice: 7/10
There were minor charater that were explained alot more than they should. This makes the reader think that they will=2 0become important later on. Such as the maid in Wen Jun's house and the three boys in chapter one.
Appearance (Poster and Background): 10/10
The poster and background was able to help the mood of the story. The background and the text fit together perfectly, and gave no difficulties for me to read.
Creativity and Bonus: 5/5
Overall total: 87/100
I had fun reading the story(: Thank you for choosing
timeless-memories!