| Fan Fiction |
by Hainexazien
Title: 2/5 The title has no relevance to your story at all. So Eun and Kim Bum fell In love, Isn't it a happy ever after ? It's not a Mistaken Happiness. Even in the beginning.
Poster and Background: 8/10 I like the poster and the background is simple. I'll give you credit for that. =D
Forewords: 4/10 The way you explained your story in the forewords was the only part when So Eun had a crush on Hyung Joong and confessed her feelings. That's why people thought It was really a Mistaken Happiness. Even I thought it was until I continued reading your story and found out there was another twist ! Make sure to put EVERYTHING in your introduction so that readers would know. Or, If you really want it to be a surprise, You can just try to ask questions about it. That way, They would be very curious.
Plot: 10/15 The plot was unique in some way, But try to improve your imagination. I know you can do more than this. ^^
Creativity/Originality: 10/15 Like I said, You were unique in some way.
Flow: 5/10 The flow was kinda fast in some chapters and sometimes It's really confusing !
I get confused to who is referring to or the one who is talking. Try to work on your writing skill.
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 7/10 Although I've seen minor errors for instance like, Punctuation & Spellings. But with your Grammar, I have no corrections at all. Great Job !
Characterization: 8/10 I like their scripts and their role in your story. Nice ! =D
Writing Style: 9/10 Just try to make it clearer so that readers and reviewers wouldn't be confuse at all.
Overall Enjoyment: 4/5 I enjoyed actually. =D
Sub Total: 67/100
Bonus: 5/5 Thank you for choosing me to review your story. ^^
Total: 72/100
I'm sorry for the delay Hainexazien ! My schedule is still a bit hectic and this was the only time I had the chance to review your story. Hope you understand ^^. And I would like to apologize you If I have offended you in any way. I am simply being honest and fair towards my profession. You can do more, I know you can. You just need improvement and you'll be okay. ^^ Have A Nice Day ! =D
I'm really sorry for the delay, all of us are very busy. :(
I hope you like it!
And thank you very much for requesting at Deja vu! :D