| Fan Fiction |
by Amy
Poster/Background: 9/10
The poster is very well done, it matches with the mood of the story and the colour for the font is just nice.
Forewords: 10/10
It’s a very detailed foreword at the same time carries a bit of suspense which will enable the reader to carry on reading. Well done.
Plot: 13/15
The whole plot is rather interesting. I believe most of the readers who read the story from the beginning would have expected them to fall in love and get together in the end. Maybe you could change a bit by making them be separated? It’s just a suggestion.
Flow: 9/10
The flow of the whole story is very smooth. There are not any loopholes and everything matches well.
Writing Style: 4/5
I love your writing style. One suggestion is leave a line in between every paragraphs to make it neater.
Character Development: 8/10
It’s quite well done. You had done a great job in describing Edison’s feelings. Keep up the good work!
Creativity/Originalty: 8/10
There are twists and turns in the story especially the last chapter. You did a great job in making me thought that Gillian was visiting Edison’s grave when she was actually visiting her mother’s grave.
Grammar/Spelling/Vocabulary: 9/10
I spotted minor spelling and grammar mistakes. Check before you post up your chapters. There is a wide variety of vocabulary used.
Overall enjoyment: 8/10
Overall I enjoyed it very much.
Bonus points: 3/5
Total points: 82/100
Comments: Your story is fantastic! Frankly speaking, although I don’t really read EG fanfics, this is the best I had ever read and it certainly arouses my interest in EG fanfics. Keep up the good work! ^^