Fan Fiction

Just A Dream [One-Shots] (COMPLETED)

by IHeartWangZi

Chapter 7

Review From YesOverYen

Story Title: Just A Dream
Author: IHeartWangZi
Fan Fiction URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/justadream/
Status: One-Shot (Completed)
Reviewer: Mariaxo @ YesOverYen

Title: 4/5
I thought the title wasn’t unique enough, but I understood how it related to the story

Poster/Background: 10/10
I am a huugee fan of photoshop and I just wanted to say I think your poster and background are great! Props to the creator

Forewords: 4/10
Uhm Forewords was kind of plain…doesn’t really explain anything

Plot: 10/15
You had like 2 stories, both different topics..the first one was really short…it wasn’t a story more like a memory. The second story was better it had a storyline and a climax

Creativity/Originality: 8/15
Umm it was kind of original but not really. I’ve seen a lot of stories with that kind of storyline, it could’ve been more unique

Flow: 7/10
Well for the first story it was way too fast. The second was pretty ok. Although I wouldn’t know which to rate

Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 10/10
All of the spelling, grammar, and vocab was not bad. Although your Chinese pinyin were spelled wrong…well some like you spelled “Ni” like “Ne”

Characterization: 4/10
Uhm you didn’t do much on characterization since you didn’t really explain their characters in the forewords of the story.

Writing Style: 10/10
Liked your writing style kinda glad its not in a script format

Overall Enjoyment: 2/5
Sorry I didn’t really enjoy it

Sub Total: 69/100

Bonus: 4/5
-I love love love Gui Gui

Total: 73/100
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What can i say?...
Not bad..Uhmm..im not disappointed.
Im actually pretty glad! :)
HAHA!!!

much love,
IHeartWangZi
071209
1:36pm