| Fan Fiction |
by mangalover93
Title: 4/5
I find the title quite unique. If I see it, it kind of makes me want to click on it and find out the ‘answer’.
Poster/Background: 5/10
I’m sorry, but the background is not working for me. In my opinion, I think the background color doesn’t match the poster at all. And the poster seems to be made in a really short period of time. I think the font and color of the letters could have been done a lot better. It might have been a lot better if the designer of the poster stuck with the same colors for the font.
Forewords: 2/5
I found the forward a bit common. I’ve seen stories that have the similar summary as yours. And I found a couple grammar mistakes.
Plot: 11/15
It wasn’t too bad. I thought that the plot was okay… It could have been better.
Flow: 8/10
There were some parts that you were taking it too quickly. Like at the part when Seungri comes home and just suddenly faints. I don’t think that he would have been able to get a high fever that quickly.
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 5/10
I think you should double check your story before posting it because I was able to find numerous vocabulary/grammar mistakes.
Characterization: 8/10
I was kind of able to understand the character’s personality and such.
Originality: 7/10
I’ve seen a lot of things like this on Winglin.
Writing style: 4/5
Overall enjoyment: 7/10
Overall score: 61/100
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Well, that's what jwyl think. Can't chance anything about that :P But I hope this won't keep people from reading this anyway..