| Fan Fiction |
by ruwee
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Title : 5/5
It's really catchy for the readers. It fits the story as well. The first time I saw it, I really want to know that big secret of Ella that's worth dying for.
Poster/Background: 10/10
It is compatible with the story. The poster is nice. And so is the background. The text is easy to read. Comfortable for the eyes. Good job. The pictures of Chun and Ella as well. It really fits the story.
Forewords: 10/10
You didn't explain the character's description but you posted the prologue of the story. That was nice. Quite catchy too. Most of the readers have that kind of Forewords too, but I really like yours. Plus, the fact that it's only a dream makes me really hyper and I don't know why. Anyway, you really turned me upside down when I learned that Selina was the one who killed Chun's parents.
Plot: 15/15
I love the characters, plus the way you express things. God, you made me cry. And I hate you for that. And I was gonna tell you that I'm joking that I told you that I hate you. Anyway, back to this review, it's so amazing. I really think it's one of the best stories in Winglin. And I really wanted to give you a perfect 15 for that. And so I did. Look on top! It is perfect. Congrats.
Creativity/Originality: 15/15
It's really an original FanFic made by ruwee. It's very creative the way you express things - I told you that a while ago - It's highly .. Highly.. Well, it's unpredictable because it's really great. Truly, sincerely. And the originality, many stories are like that, to be honest. But the "Ella killing Chun's parents" part, wow, that's your original work. Well maybe some can have that setting but I really love the way you interpreted this story. For this, I give you a perfect, perfect, 15 points.
Writing Style: 10/10
I love it too. Nice, neat, and clean. Oh God, that's what you call perfection. Nothing to comment on this. Perfect 10 for you, by the way.
Flow: 10/10
Oh God, perfectly perfect. 10 again. No comment.
Spelling/Grammar/Vocab: 8/10
I don't really found some errors, and I really envy you! You're se good at English! I guess your teacher in English gave you an A++ in your report card in English. Anyway, here's some that I would like you to take note.
1. “I’ll miss you to/o, Hebs.” I replied and hugged her back.
Maybe it's a typing mistake.. And another one.
2. So, I’m asking you now if I should or should not accept his/her job proposal.”
You typed "his". Maybe it's another typing mistake. Another one, also.
He muttered, with Rainie cupping her mouth as if she was sleepy and all as she carried Camille/d up on the sofa to sit beside her
You typed "Camilled". But, it's all good all the way! 8 over 10!
Characterization: 10/10
I love it! You rock, really. Chun and Ella is the best.
Overall Enjoyment: 4/5
Yeah. Is crying a part of Enjoyment? I really cried when Chun died. And I really totally hate you for that. And now, I'm serious. Argh. I hate you. Damn it. Ugghh. Why did you let Chun die? What the hell. Anyway, I enjoyed all the way and of course I bursted out laughters, sometimes, and of course tears. And all of it. I love your story. And for my record, one of the best stories in www.winglin.net. And I really idolize you now. Truly, sincerely. And I love you for that. For this all, I give you 4 over 5. Yeah. Minus 1 for making me cry. Joke. Anyway, I really love your story and I really love your story and I really love your- Okay, I keep on repeating it. But I truly mean it and I truly- Okay, I won't do it again. Okay. That's final. I hope you continue updating your stories - which I'm a fan of but actually, I'm just a silent reader here and I don't want to bother you - especially Incest in Love because that's my favorite of many of your worls. Thanks again. Good bye. :-h By the way, it was nice reading and reviewing your story. I really enjoyed it.
Total points: 97/100
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I just realized now that I have so many typos, it`s such a same. Uh, and, for the A++ for English, I guess you`re wrong. :)) =)) The highest so far is B. :| :| :|