| Fan Fiction |
by mushiromigal
Title: 4/5
The title is interesting, but it's not really attention grabbing. However, you get points for the title and its relevance to the story.
Poster/Background: 6/10
The poster is okay, but it doesn't really fit with the story. The background is okay as well.
Foreword: 3/10
To tell you the truth, I really didn't like the forewords. It was really weird, and it made me want to stop reading the fan fic. Also, the readers will know the diary is named Angel if it is addressed as thus.
Plot: 7/15
The plot was really similar to all the other stories out there, but I give you points for your spontaneous randomness and funniness.
Creativity: 7/15
This is the same as the plot. In addition to that, I'm seeing way too many CE, Selina/Jiro, and Hebe/Arron couples. Everyone's doing the same things!
Writing style: 7/10
It really bugs me to see people writing in script style, where they use semi-colons to indicate when people talk. It's confusing, and it takes away from the reading experience.
Flow: 7/10
There were parts where it was fast-paced, and there were parts where it was really slow.
Grammar/spelling/vocab: 6/10
There were some grammar and spelling errors in each chapter, and the vocabulary was pretty much elementary.
Characterization: 6/10
There characters had no real depth to them, and most of them are interchangeable. Their personalities are all the same.
Overall enjoyment: 4/5
I thought this fan fic was really funny. I liked the ending bloopers thing the most.
Keep up the good work, and don't get too discouraged about the score. I'm a harsh grader. If you work on a few things, your score will improve dramatically.
Total: 57/100
Oh well...at least i passed...thanks!Yuni Cho from http://www.freewebs.com/moonlight-mysteries/