| Fan Fiction |
by octavian
Poster and background (10/10)As we at Chikaranouta feel that the author can decorate the story as they want, we won't take points off for your choice.
Character development (8/10)I thought it was kind of weird how one moment the guys were perfectly fine and then the next they were rapists or doing something to hurt MiYoung.But I'm glad you didn't just through in random developments and characters and that they each had some sort of purpose. Still, the characters personalities did seem rather conflicting.
Grammer, spelling and punctuation (7/10)I noticed a few silly mistakes in most of your chapters. Do be careful when it comes to words like "similar" and "tried" and such.
Overall flow of story (10/10)I thought it went pretty well. You didn't really skip over things and gave thoughts from other characters regarding the actions around them.
Entertainment factor (10/10)I have to say, it was pretty entertaining. Granted, it was a little unoriginal, but it was entertaining.
Originality (12/20)You only got twelve points since this plot seems like a combination of two rather popular sort of plots. Like a girl dancer falls in love with a Big Bang member and the always popular, guys of all types seem to love main girl. However, since you didn't have the "male lead cheats on female lead" type of plot thrown in, I gave you a few extra points.
Font color(5/5)It was easy on the eyes for the readers.
Format (4/5)I can't say I'm a fan of the script format, but I like how you included descriptions of things most script form author's leave out or only describe shortly. Especially since actions of the characters are necessary for the readers to get a good grasp of character's personalities.
Total Points: 76/100
Miki from www.freewebs.com/chikaranouta
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i also got featured on this site from July 4- July 11.
i requested for this review less than 5 hours ago and i got it already! :D i'm glad they worked on it so soon. maybe because they already read it. O.o