| Fan Fiction |
by octavian
Title: 4/5
Very cute title! It gives readers a basic knowlege on what they're reading. (:
Poster/Background: 7/10
CUTE poster, but the front page, the dark blue doesnt go with the purple. It's really hard to read through that kay? (:
Forewords: 7/10
Interesting forewords, I like that you actually described the characters in the story, but maybe you should consider writing the rough sketch of the story?
Plot: 12/15
I like the plot, it makes sense and it is a very cute story, makes people smile unconsciously when they're reading it. (:
Creativity/Originality: 10/15
I've seen stories like this before, but it does a tiny flair to it yeah? (:
Writing Style: 8/10
It is a lot of conversations, I would think it's too little of self-writing, but its just a personal opinion.
Flow: 7/10
It has tiny glitches here and there but I think its overall good. (:
Spelling/Grammar/Vocab: 5/10
you really must keep in consideration your grammer and vocab. Spotted many mistakes in every chapter so maybe those words you're not sure of, either don't write them or look them up kay? (:
Characterization: 7/10
Some characters are kind of unknown so please describe more! The ones that were detailed were detailed really well, so maybe pay more attention to that.
Overall enjoyment: 3/5
It is a wonderful story with cute moments and I hope to read more of it! (:
Total: 70/100
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