| Fan Fiction |
by octavian
1. Appearance (Poster. Background, Font, Colors, etc.) - 5/10
You didn't have a poster & background with your story which attracts reader the most when they first click on the link to your story but you still had a picture of the boys to represent that their the characters of the story. The backround is plain too but the font goes very well with the background.
2. Title - 5/5
The title was very catchy at and being a sequel from the story 'Loveless For Now', it makes sense that the title would be You still love me.
3. Forewords - 10/10
Honestly, your forewords was so detailed and you made sure to include all of the characters description would satisfy the reader. There was parts where it kind of got mysterious which was perfect but the rest was just character descriptions which was very creative.
4. Plot - 10/15
You have a good plot line and you chose to expand it which was a good thing. I loved the issues that was revolving around each person but I felt as if at times it got confusing because one chapter it was all about this one other guy and the next was a different one. But I guess that in a way, you managed to bring it and I think that you did this so you could explain more on what's happening and what was the main conflict (5 guys liking her at the same time). I also loved how one of the conflicts was that she was having secret feelings for her friend's boyfriend which tends to happen alot in real life. You became realistic with it, if you know what I'm saying.
5. Spelling, Gramma & Puntuation - 9/10
You almost got this part perfect but there was some mistakes with spelling and grammar. But I got to say that you did a good job with it. I mean, come on, your stories has 50+ chapters! It was good that there was only errors once in a while
6. Style - 15/15
I'm not a big fan of stories where they don't really include details and use the script format instead but being the first kind of story I read that was like this, It was pretty good! I loved your style for you included details every now and then to where you need to put them.
" We have been through thick and thin. JiYong's attempted murder. SeungHyun's attempted rape. 4 kisses that weren't supposed to happen. Fights. Hardships. Confusion. Jealousy. " : This is one of the lines I loved the most in your story. It was like a temptation for the readers to want more of the story! It was catchy and clever at the same time, putting it on the first chapter.
7. Description - 10/10 You did a good job in describing your characters (wow, I've been saying that throughout, lol) not only in your forewords but in your whole story.
8. Characters - 10/10
You did a good job in this part for not only did you include LOTS OF DESCRIPTION for your charaters on your forewords but you also included them in your story. Nice!
9. Overrall - 10/15
The story was fun to read. Not one of my favorites since I don't read rated stories but to complete the review I kind of had to :p. The ending was alright but I think you could have came off with something better.
Total : 84/100
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