| Fan Fiction |
by Allison
The title is very fit for the story. Like you said, Mi Young was unforgettable. Plus, at the end, you said it was unforgettable too. So everything made sense and the title really matched the story.
Poster/background: 10/10
The poster and background was fine. To me, the poster was very eye-catching and the background was good. The text was also easy to read, so full marks to you <3.
Plot: 8/10
The plot was great in many ways. I liked how you put the suspense in some of parts of the story. It was...suspensing (lol)? You included great problems like Isobel getting pregnant, Mi Young falling out of the window, etc, which made the story extra addicting and good.
Flow: 7/10
The flow was great, but sometimes I get lost, because you sorta just skip to the next scene all of a sudden and you leave me going like, 'uhhhh did I doubleclick o.O?'. Otherwise, the flow was great :].
Forewords: 6/10
The forewords are okay. You did describe the characters, and I know it can get tiring, having to be very descriptve for all those characters, so for me, it's okay. You get to know more about the characters later on in the story, so I'm okay about it. But the thing I didn't like was that you made such a short summary xD. You need to be more specific and put more in the summary to make it more interesting and making the readers HAVE to read it.
Creativity/Originality: 8/10
Your creativity and originality is very unique. I liked how you put so much problems in there and how you had a mixture of a sad and happy ending in the story. It made me go like 'Yay! HAPPY ENDING!!!' and then suddenly..'NO!! WHY?!?! (lol)' Everything was very original, etc., but some of the stuff sorta feels like it happens alot in stories. Work on that part, try to make fully different.
Writing style: 9/10
I love your writing style! It was absolutely easy to read with. It was not confusing and boring, etc. Your writing is very good.
Grammar/Spelling: 16/20
Your grammar is almost perfect. It's just that you sometimes forget to put the Ss and and the past tense stuff once in a while. And as you get on in the story you sort of start getting careless about your writing and start making more mistakes. Becareful on that mmkay?
Overall enjoyment: 15/15
I absolutely loved the story. I kept wanting to read it and reading it! Your story is very interesting and mind-pulling. The suspenses and plotting is very....UNIQUE! Everything is very neat and organized. I hope you keep working on your writing!
Total: 84/100
Comments: LOL! Sorry I'm weird and hyper, leaving up all the stuff like 'NO!!!' etc. Lol, I admire you and hope that you keep working on your writing korea..I mean career lol. I'm sorry I'm jumping up and down right now with my friend..so yea ^^' I hope you liked my review!
Special McAsian <3 @ http://www.so-ish.co.nr/
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getting reviewed by a hyper person is fun, isn't it? LOL!~
and she says that i should keep up with my writing career. anyone care to agree with me? i will be continuing until my fingers hurt! *checks fingers* they don't hurt so i'll be on winglin for a VERY VERY VERY LONG TIME!!!