~Four Seasons~ A collection of one shots COMPLETE
by Isa
Chapter 51
Review by artsyasiancrew xD
Four Seasons~A Collection of Oneshots by Isa
Reviewer: Juliada3
Review Rubric
Title 3/5
Your title matches your oneshots in the seasons, but because of the title, you made it seem as if the seasons would play a very important part in the story, other than as a setting.
Forewords 8/10
You still could explain the characters. I know that you have like a billion, but you could give a brief description so that people can see what the characters are like.
Plot 17/20
In the first 20 chapters, the plotlines were mostly the same. Two good friends realize that they like each other. I was getting a little bored, and then you changed it up, so I was glad. You could add some more ideas into your oneshots, and it would be even better.
Originality 3/5
I am amazed that you could think up so many different plotlines. I know several are kind of cliche and stuff, but i still think you have a pretty good imagination.
Grammar/Spelling/Transitions 9/15
On a couple of the oneshots, I saw some things that were capitalized that didn’t need to be. You had a couple of word problems, where I saw words that didn’t make sense in the sentence.
Flow (speed of the story) 8/10
The oneshots flow well, and it doesn’t seem like you are in a hurry to end them. It works well.
Choice of words/Idiom/quotes 6/10
It is not bad, but you could do with some improvement.
Details/Settings/Characterization 10/15
You had some good details on some oneshots, but then on others it seemed like there could be lots more.
Enjoyable? 7/10
I liked this collection of oneshots. It is pretty unique and different.
Over All Score 71/100
EXTRAS:
Praises:
Any specific part or quote you like:
In chapter 12, I liked the part when the little girl told Yuri that if a guy wants to pay for you, then that means they like you. I thought that was funny. In chapter 25, it made me feel so sad when he died. That chapter was written pretty good.
Needs Recommendation?
Chapter 44 seemed a bit rushed. I think it would have been better if you had told the story of him leaving. Then everything would have seemed more complete. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
A/N: thank you Juliada! i know I have work to do. lol. =]