| Fan Fiction |
by MIzconfuz3d
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Reviewed by Suki @ http://angelic-colors.net/
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Title: Poise: Rise of Vengeance (part 1)
Author: MIzconfuz3d
URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/poise1
Reviewer: Suki
Title: 10/10
The title really catches my attention and it fits the plot of your story.
Poster/Background: 10/10
Poster and Background is very well matched. It matches the mood and the graphic poster was very nicely made.
Cast: 3/5
You gave the name of the cast but you didn’t give a nice and brief description of their characters.
Foreword: 5/10
It was very short. It didn’t give much explanation on the idea. Although you gave a quick sentence or two of the VN and the Poise Agency.
Originality and Creativity: 10/10
You have plenty of originality and creativity. The genre of it was really original. It was a fantasy story but it had like darkness and love and drama all at the same time. I really enjoyed it.
Story & Plot: 15/20
The story and plot. What can I say? It was great. The story really catches my interest, and the plot was insanely cool.
Flow: 9/10
Everything seems to be in place. From the beginning where it all first started with the rock to the meeting of her and the poise agency to the encounterment with the vampires and the end where Donghae dies.
Writing Style: 10/10
Every time you would go into a different scene, you would have your paragraphs seperated so that really helped. It was nice and neat.
Spelling, Grammar, and Vocabulary: 7/10
“She climbed inside his bedroom window without anyone seeing her since it was nighttime”.
The sentence you wrote was written backwards.
The way the sentence should’ve been written as:”Since it was night time and dark outside, she climbed into his bedroom window without anyone noticing.”
It would also help if you took some time to briefly go through and proofread before posting it up.
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Overall Enjoyment: 5/5
Like I said. The title caught my attention and the plot was really intrested.
Bonus: 3/5
As a first timer, you were really good at writing the story and it was a great one to read.
Reviewer Comment: I liked this story and I encourage you to keep on writing. One tip I can give you as of now is to always proofread to check if you mispelled any words and if your vocabulary was correct. Other than that, I really enjoyed it.
Total: 87/100 pts.
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Reviewed by Suki @ http://angelic-colors.net/
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Thank you for completing the review :)
<3 Mizconfuz3d