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by MIzconfuz3d
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Reviewed by Sayori Mikura @ http://symphonicmelody.co.nr/
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Poise: Rise of Vengeance (PART 1) by MIzconfuz3d
http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/poise1/
Reviewed By : Sayori Mikura
Note: These are my honest opinions. I do not take account of the stories I review based on popularity votes. I strongly recommend that you get reviews from other reviewing sites. I am here to help, not to judge.
Title 4/5
I like the title very much. But to be honest, if I were looking for a story to read, I'd just scroll pass by it. It fits the story well, and it's a creative title, yes. But not eye-catching enough.
Poster/Background 10/10
Lovely poster! It really relates to your story and that's a good thing. A dark, dramatic poster for a dark, dramatic story. I've seen some with a lot of comedic twists in their story but having very serious, depressing conversations among the characters.
Plot 13/15
I like your idea how there's a secret organization specifically made to protect humans from vampires. But I don't like the idea of how they kill in order to protect. But that's just me. I'm too thoughtful. Vampires are born with that thirst for blood and that's what they need to survive. Enough of that. I like how you killed off one of the main characters of the love triangle. It really creates an impact to the whole story and the relationship between the three.
Flow 7/10
You went at the right pace when writing this and I salute you for that. But there were some parts that seemed rushed; but it's not that obvious. The scene when Donghae was killed is very rushed. You didn't describe enough and that's what makes readers go 'Whaaaat?!' when the story ends.
Writing Style 5/5
You have a very distinctive writing style. Keep up the good work!
Character Developement 10/10
Ah, and this is where I really salute you! This is my first my first time reading ANYTHING with Koreans in them mainly because I'm into Japanese. But bare in mind that I don't have anything against them. I just prefer the Japanese. You made me read your story as it is and not because I have any attraction to the characters or anything.
Creativity/Originality 6/10
Sorry. Not so much points here. There's just too many vampire stories out there now; Twilight being the more popular ones. It's just over-rated and I just see it everywhere now. However, the twists you added in diverted my attention.
Grammar/Spelling/Vocabularities 9/10
You have a very strong command in English. Keep up the good work. However, there's some rare moments where you used words that aren't suppose to be there. And some typos. But I don't think that's entirely your fault. Take the time to re-read your chapters with a 10minute break each time you re-read them. You can't rely on Microsoft Word spell checks all the time. Your 'it's' often turn into 'I''s.
Overall Enjoyment 9/10
I really enjoyed your story. The deducted point was because I didn't relate to the characters very much til after reading through a quarter of your story.
Bonus Point 5/5
Full points for being able to make me read through your story without feeling like it's such a drag to read stories with people I'm not familiar with!
Total = 78/100
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Thanks for completing the review :)
<3 Mizconfuz3d