Star Lover ((Complete))
by riz-2611
Chapter 13
Reviewed by Morning_Glory @ artsyasiancrew
• Title 5/5 It reflected the special thing in common between them, which I think was perfect.
• Forewords 10/10 The Forewords was pretty good.
• Plot 17/20 The plot is pretty good. But there could be more events that you put in. The brothers don’t really appear much, and when they do, they only come in for a bit.
Originality 3/5 There are a couple stories that have a person dying from a disease, but their loved one is still alive. But it’s still pretty original.
• Grammar/Spelling/Transitions 10/15 There are some grammar problems, but I can still pretty much understand it, so I didn’t take off much.
• Flow (speed of the story) 10/10 It flows pretty well, the story keeps moving forward.
• Choice of words/Idiom/quotes 8/10 The choice of words were pretty good, just that you could’ve used a bit of variety.
• Details/Settings/Characterization 12/15 There could have been more details about the characters and what they’re doing.
• Enjoyable? 10/10 It was very good. I was almost in tears when I read the last two chapters, it was so sad.
• Over All Score 85/100
Good job! Continue doing your best and writing great fanfics for us to read.------------------------------------------------------------------------------
Thanks for the honest review :D heheheh...
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Note:
I'm sorry because i didnt update :) i run off idea and busy with the school... Yeah, i will be holiday from 15th june to 29th june :D happy but i still will go to School for extra classes and do school projects :) Hehehe... i could say that i will not have a holiday because i still has to attend to school... YEah, teachers are soo cruel to me :( i will be update this story as soon as posible, after finising this story, i will write another one :D hahhaha... hmm, i had fight today :P ahahhah... No info for that :D heheheh... Thanks for the comments :D
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Brunei Darussalam
3.20 PM
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10.june.2009