| Fan Fiction |
by Masked_Princess
*My reviews are not meant to harm or discourage the author, but to help them fix their stories and do better in the future. The opinions expressed in this review are mine and mine alone, and are not meant to offend you*
Title: 3/5
The title let the reader know that this was a vampire story, but it kind of gave away the ending to the story. It's like writing a drama and having the title be "He dies before they get married" as the title.
Background/Poster: 7/10
mm it's not like its an eye sore or anything, but eh... the poster is just kind of awkward to look at. It's not a normal looking poster, not made ith photoshop or anything, but it still looks fine for the story ^^
Forewords: 4/10
. . .<. adding more words or paragraphs and details could easily fix this though. and... normally one shots are only one chapter long...
Overall enjoyment: 2/5
Truthfully I liked it until the last few chapters. I didn't understand why he was randomly flirting with the waitress, or why he had to bring her to his mansion to tell her that he was Fang Boy/ Vampire. I liked how she still stayed with him though, but then the last line to the story, about her and her friend, it just didn't really fit. If you would have kept it with them embracing I think it would have added a lot more to the end of the story.
Sub Total: 53/100
Bonus: 5/5
Bonus for attempting! and for a new name for vampires ^^
Total: 58/105