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by UnknownViet
Poster and Background: 9/10
I can read you text with no difficulties at all. You din't use much colors since you only focused on gray and white and your poster is AWESOME!
Forewords: 7/10
I completely LOVED your forewords! Your forewords states the past and his feelings. I really like that. Though you would have got a higher mark if you described the characters a little bit.
Plot: - 10/15
It's a little common to me but your plot is really interesting!
Creativity/Originality: 12/15
As I said, it's a little common. I've read it in books before but you had your own twists. Your ending wasn't expected. I thought it'll be a happy-ending but I guess I was wrong. Most of your story is creative and some parts of it like your ending is original.
Flow: - 8/10
For my opinion it was between these two, fast and just perfect! Some parts were perfect and some parts went a little too fast.
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 8/10
Your mistakes are really common.
Don't start a new sentence with a but or an and.
Characterization: 8/10
You described you characters just perfectly! Though you could describe Miki a LITTLE bit more.
Writing Style: -10/10
I have no problem with your writing style.
Overall Enjoyment: 3/5
I'm not a big fan of the characters in your story but I did enjoy your plot especially the ending....
Sub Total: 79/100
Bonus: -3/5
Total: -82/100
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Reviewed by Guilun0123