| Fan Fiction |
by ~Genuie Cari~
Title: 5/5
The title matched your story well!
Poster/Background: 10/10
I loved the poster it was really pretty and I thought it matched well with your fic!
Forewords: 5/10
The forewords was really boring and you didn't add a plot.
You did add characters however, so I gave you points for that.
The plot was also really confusing.
Plot: 12/15
The plot was okay. It was different.
Your plot was somewhat different but it was predictable. You should of added more conflicts in the plot to make it interesting.
Creativity/Originality: 15/15
I though it was creative and original you did a great job on this part.
Flow: 9/10
The flow was nice. It wasn't too fast nor slow!
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 8/10
I saw some spelling here and there but it wasn't big so they weren't that noticeable.
But however you need to expand your vocabulary.
Characterization: 7/10
I didn't really get the characters but I got enough to fallow the story.
So next time make the characters pop out more.
Writing Style: 8/10
I liked the writing style but I felt that the details were forced.
Like you repeated a lot and about the rosy cheeks and all.
So you should just let it flow and don't try to think about it much.
Just write.
Overall Enjoyment: 5/5
I enjoyed it, it was really nice and it was interesting to read.
Sub Total: 84/100
Bonus: 3/5
Total: 87/105
I hope you take my review as a positive thing and work on the little mistakes.
So you will become a better writer!