| Fan Fiction |
by Miss Ahn
Story Title : Wrong Kiss
Author : Miss Ahn
URL : http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/wrongkiss/
Reviewed by : Cheryline @ bubblepop
Appearance (Poster. Background, Font, Colors, etc.) n/a I don�ft think I can give this poster grades since it was done by bubblepop. But I think that it looks really cute though. :D
Title: 4/5 Sounds quite interesting, as a wrong KISS is not very common, right? :D
Forewords: 8.5/10 Detailed forewords. I got to understand the story quite quickly, but a little normal, mybe you can try something new :D.
Plot: 12/15 I have to say that the plot is unique in its own way but the main storyline is still boy and girl has some misunderstandings, boy and girl hate each other and finally they fall in love. BUT, the thing I really like about your story is the way you do not rush into things and create 1001 opportunities for them to be together, as it makes your story seem more real. :D
Spelling, Grammar & Punctuation 9/10 Really good. An occasional error or two occasionally but keep it up! :D
Style: 13/15. You always try to leave a cliffhanger at the end of each chapter which is really good. However, your writing style is a little common.
Description: 9/10 You described the places, feelings and actions of the characters very, I just think you could have been added my specific descriptions.
Characters 7/10 I like the way you made TOP respond really differently in different situations. The way that the characters respond often surprises, and the way you describe them is really fantastic. However, I believe that if I am a fan of theirs too, I would like them even more. Sorry.:D
Overall: 12.5/15 The thing is, this is my first time doing a review so I may not be as professional as the others, give me time. :D Your story was really great for someone like me who does not really like stories on stars rising to stardom as they seem quite fake to me, but you did not overdo the �gstar�h parts and even made it to your advantage. For example, when Taeyang was approached by the fan girls at the restaurant. As I am not a really big fanatic of Korean actors/singers, I did not really get the chance to feel the chemistry between the actors, but the way you described it was terrific. :D Good work there! :D
Total: 83.3%
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BTW: i need a minor character's name to join Yoobin's class . it has to be a guy ^^ so please give me suggestion of names ~ *EDIT: actually i just need a male name . he might not be a minor character ... who knows ?!*
Thank you very much for taking your time in reviewing this ^^
I'm pretty proud of myself considering I'm not a pro at this stuff and i got an 83% ! i feel so happy [=
haha i hope you still continue reading my fanfic
& I APPRECIATE ALL THOSE WHO COMMENT HERE , i will continue the "good work" ! (=